Vampire RPG :D

[PirateBeckkayy]

Hey guys! This is PirateBeckkayy!
So, I'm hoping you all know what vampires are Anyway, this is it.
You are all vamps in the modern day. You are also part of the country's royal family. You live in a beautiful old castle. But you have to keep your identities a secret, or you will be killed. Who lives and who dies? Lets find out!

People:
Electra
Kaidey
Evangalina
Mordia (me)

Chase
Eric
Nathaniel (Nate for short)
Michael

[Miranda_]

I'm sorry, but your RP does not abide by the rules listed here and here. Since you are obviously new to this forum, I would suggest that you read these rules before posting a new RP.

What is wrong with your RP? Well, I will tell you. Firstly, every RP that is posted here needs a good solid plot consisting of at least three big paragraphs. You will also need another paragraph to describe to fellow RPers the rules of the world your RP is set in, and pertaining to any different species; in this case, vampires. For an example of an RP which fits the criteria, click here. This RP not only uses four large paragraphs to detail the plot, it also has several describing the races. Your plot is insufficient. Just having a single sentence is just not good enough. Neither is simply stating, "So, I'm hoping you all know what vampires are " instead of giving details on your vampires. People read different books about vampires and watch different movies; you can't just assume that everyone is on the same page as you are as far as vampire characteristics go.

Finally, you not only have no intro (click the example RP to see what I mean by intros) but you have zero characterisation at all. You need to provide a character sheet (ie name, age, power, bio) or describe your character in your intro; you can't just list characters like you have done. Please join the Newbies RP, which can be found here, which would help you with creating good, believable characters. I would suggest doing so, and reading the rules I have linked you to, before attempting to post another RP in this forum.