Elven University [RP]

[TheHayleyDoll]

Jackie smiled at him, "Yeah."

[Singergirl0911]

He gave her a small smirk.

[TheHayleyDoll]

Ooc: What post? O.o

[LexxaLovee_]

Originally Posted by RAiiNBOWxKiiSSES_

Hey Hayley Can i join?

Name:Carly Linlood
Age:18
Occupation (student, professor, etc.):Student
Classes:Magic and Art
Race (Elf, human, half):Half
Image/Appearance Description:http://www.uvouch.com/userphoto/anime_girl236.jpg
Personality (at least 5 attributes. 2 must be negative.):Quiet,Clumsy,Loud Mouthed,Happy,Is Peacefull,Intelligant. (Please tell me if there okay..i will change if not)
Biography/Other:Couzin Of Hans.

Name:Hans LightingDale
Age:19
Occupation (student, professor, etc.):Student
Classes:Law and History.
Race (Elf, human, half):Elf
Image/Appearance Description:http://images.elfwood.com/art/d/a/darrenr/boy.jpg
Personality (at least 5 attributes. 2 must be negative.):
Biography/Other:immature,caring,kind,peacefull,Stuborn,Sweet .

Is That Okay?
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Edit-
Sure..um..
Hans walked across the stubby concrete ground while talking to his couzin,Carly about a reason subject that happened a while ago. "Yes that was funny wasn't it?"Laughed Carly."Ofcourse it was" Hans replied.

That Post xD

[TheHayleyDoll]

Ooc: You still don't seem experienced enough in your writing style.

Your opening paragraph: Hans walked across the stubby concrete ground while talking to his couzin,Carly about a reason subject that happened a while ago. "Yes that was funny wasn't it?"Laughed Carly."Ofcourse it was" Hans replied.

Should be written: Hans walked across the stubby concrete ground while talking to his cousin Carly about a reason subject ---((I'm not sure what 'a reason subject' means...))-- that happened a while ago.

"Yes that was funny wasn't it?" laughed Carly.

"Of course it was," Hans replied.


It should also have been longer since it is an opening post...

[LexxaLovee_]

Ive made it longer.

[TheHayleyDoll]

Ooc: Sorry, but I still don't think I can say yes. Why don't you try the newbie RPs of write one of your own?

[Miranda_]

Ooc: Raiinbow, please stop harrassing Hayley about letting you join her RP. In case you didn't know, harrassment is against forum rules. She has said already that she doesn't want you to join, so please stop spamming her RP asking her. I will not tell you again; if you don't leave her alone you will be punished.

RLY RLY srry if I'm interrupting, but I wanna join if that's k with you guys.

Name:Sakura Hanashimo
Age:17
Occupation:Student
Classes:Magic, Math, Law
Race:Half- Elf
Personality:Hyper, Happy, Generous, Brave, Loving
Appearance:

Sakura started to get ready for the first day of her new university. She changed into her favorite pair of jeans and green halter top. Sakura took out the work she missed the first weeks of school, and had almost finished it all.
" Crap, I didn't finish it all yet." moaned Sakura. " Well I better get movin' in time for lunch!" Sakura sat down at her desk and began the last part of her work. Then she got up wiht a tired expression and ran to her teacher." Here, all done after hours of study hall." wheezed Sakura after all that running.Sakura took the stairs back to her dorm where she jumped onto the small,individual bed and fell asleep.

[TheHayleyDoll]

Ooc: Your character is a Sue. Where are her negative qualities? And I said only 2 classes each.

EDIT: Oh, and a Half-Elf wouldn't have a Japanese name. Even if it was half Japanese. It would have an Elven name, most likely. And your character is too young to be in University. I thought you had to be 18...