Harry Potter RP {For RPG Newbies ONLY}

[Dasoftballbandit]

Ok, I edited it again...

[Miranda_]

That's fine. Carry on...

[Miss_Spaz]

Nikki stared at the button girl. She felt sorry for her. Stuff like that had happened to her alot at her old school. She gathered her things and hurried across the hall, trying not to be seen by any teachers. She finally reached the button girl side and sat down next to her "Hi!" She said holding out her book "Whoops!" She dropped the book and held out her hand for a shake. "I'm Nikki."

[Dasoftballbandit]

Originally Posted by Miss_Spaz

Nikki stared at the button girl. She felt sorry for her. Stuff like that had happened to her alot at her old school. She gathered her things and hurried across the hall, trying not to be seen by any teachers. She finally reached the button girl side and sat down next to her "Hi!" She said holding out her book "Whoops!" She dropped the book and held out her hand for a shake. "I'm Nikki."

Shia smiled politely and shook the girl's hand.
"Shia...I'm Shia..."
She let go of Nikki's hand and pulled her hair into a tight ponytail with her bangs curved to the right side of her face.
"What house are you in?" She said quietly. Shia had never been a very good person to have a convorsation with since she talked so softly.

[Miss_Spaz]

Originally Posted by Dasoftballbandit

Shia smiled politely and shook the girl's hand.
"Shia...I'm Shia..."
She let go of Nikki's hand and pulled her hair into a tight ponytail with her bangs curved to the right side of her face.
"What house are you in?" She said quietly. Shia had never been a very good person to have a convorsation with since she talked so softly.

"Gryffindor." Niki said, gloomily. "Wish I were in Hufflepuff, though. Then we could be in the same house."

[Dasoftballbandit]

Originally Posted by Miss_Spaz

"Gryffindor." Niki said, gloomily. "Wish I were in Hufflepuff, though. Then we could be in the same house."

Shia just looked up and grinned smugly.
"Yeah...I wish I were in Gryffindor, though I dont think I would be worthy of that house..."
Shia looked down at her bag and picked at the buttons shyly.

[adolescence_girl]

Full Name: Brittain Royale
Name or nickname they like to be called by: B, Britt, or by the teachers, Miss Royale.
House Desired (Ravenclaw, Slytherin, Hufflepuff, Gryffindor): Gryffindor
Gender: Female
Age: 14
Appearance: Tall,shoulder length shiny black hair w/ bangs, Deep green eyes (they change color), and light skin.
Personality: Sweet if your nice to her, but if you get on her bad side,she's a real fire cracker.
Class (as in Pure Blood, Half Blood, or Muggleborn): Muggleborn
Strengths (as in subjects and non-subjects): Divination, and Potions (strangely)
Weaknesses (as in subjects and non-subjects): Boys, and Teachers.

[Miranda_]

That's a Mary Sue. Firstly, the teachers wouldn't call anyone Miss just cuz they wanted to be called that; second, colour changing eyes are a sign of a Mary Sue; third, you have listed NO character faults; finally, you have listed NO lessons weaknesses. Boys and Teachers is NOT counted as a lesson weakness; plus all students in this RP are 11 and don't have boyfs.

Please edit your profile if you want to continue.

[Singergirl509]

ooc: Wow...I've NEVER seen a Mary Sue this bad! I think you need to look at some of Miranda_'s stickies/rules to figure where you went wrong.

[evilfairy321]

Full Name: Hailey Lydia
Name or nickname they like to be called by: Lydia
House Desired (Ravenclaw, Slytherin, Hufflepuff, Gryffindor):Hufflepuff
Gender: Female
Age:11
Appearance: long brown hair with bangs,with teal blue eyes,with paleish skin,medium
Personality: Shy,yet nice,not the bravest or the smartest,courageous at moments
Class (as in Pure Blood, Half Blood, or Muggleborn):Half blood
Strengths (as in subjects and non-subjects):broom flying,and spellcasting
Weaknesses (as in subjects and non-subjects):she`s not the socialist,but she can make friends,she is terrible at dark magic