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Default 12-01-2010, 11:45 PM






Name: Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern.


Age: She is only 14, young compared to the other shadowhunters she lives with, as they are either adults or 17 year olds still left in the care of the Institute. However, she is so experienced and advanced, that when the Nephilim go on raids, though she isn't of age, they pick her over the oldest and wisest Shadowhunters.


Fandom: The Mortal Instruments/The Infernal Devices


Drabble: A ravener demon. Agramon, a greater demon. A Raum demon. And a Kuri Demon. With only a sword to defend herself if things got out of hand. The Mortal Instruments (the Mortal Cup and the Soul Sword) floating ominously in the background, needing to be saved before they were brought to her father. The future of the world on her sholders. And she was all alone. This was going to be a breeze.


For other Shadowhunters, this task would be impossible. To kill off one greater demon without her, it had Jonathan Christopher, her boyfriend, Clarissa, her sister, Alexander and Isabelle, Jonathan Christopher's adoptive brother and sister all of their combined skills and magic weapons, and the help of Clarissa's vampire ex-boyfriend. It had taken The 5 of them nearly a month to figure out where the Mortal Cup was located and to retrieve it, but then they had lost it, and gave up. But for Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern, she had found both Mortal Insturments at the same time, without having to look for them. And taking on 4 demons, including a greater demon, would be no problem for her.


Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern was an excellent fighter. Everyone knew that. But for all that she was so advanced in combat, she hated having to do it. She hated killing anything, even the demons who she knew didn't really die, and didn't have a soul anyways. She was innocent and sweet, and always tried to help other living things out when they needed help. However, she knew that demons killed innocent humans and Downworlders, and she killed them anyway, knowing it would be in the world's best interest.


She looked Agramon in the eyes and smirked. She noticed that the demons had not seen the Mortal Instruments behind them. That makes her job even easier. Stupid human. Agramon yelled out hoarsely. Move out of the way of Agramon, or so be destroyed yourself. Agramon opened his eyes up, as they had been shut due to the bright light of Manhattan. Upon opening them, he had seen the beautiful siloette of Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern, and found her breathtaking, despite she was one of the Nephilim. When she stepped out in the street, he saw her in full. She was gorgeous, beautiful, ravishing. Every word that mean pretty, thats what she was. When she smirked at him, he almost died inside. He wanted to be with her so badly, depsite everything his loyalty to her father, Valentine, and his life. He wanted to be with her, to be good. Simply dazzled by her, he glided up to her, straight into the sword, dissolving into gray dust, coating her shoes in the fine dust. One down, 3 to go. Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern thought happily. She hadn't even had to do much. Once the blade touched the greater demon and reduced him to dust, the weight of the world was taken off of her, and she breathed deeply. This was much more easy than she had anticipated.


Without their leader, the other demons just stood there, not knowing what to do. Or being dazzled by her beauty as well. Probably both. While they weren't paying attention, and it would be the most bearable for them, and herself, Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern walked up to them and all at once, cut off their heads with the long blade. With impact of the angel-sword, the demons all turned to ash, now blowing down the streets of Manhattan.


The Mortal Cup and Soul Sword fell to the ground, no long held up in the air by the demons' presence. She ran over to them and picked them up, the Mortal Cup in one hand, and the Sou Sword in another, and ran off towards the harbour to use the Soul Sword to kill her father, Valentine, before he could inflict any more damage on the humans, downworlders, and Shadowhunters.


This would be another fight Rosetta Tiffany Marie Sunshine Iridessa Selena Aphrodite Elizabeth Victorie Lauryne Wayland-Morgestern would have to face alone. But again, it was a fight that would better the world. One that would once again put the weight of the world on her shoulders.

Doll: 7/10 Drabble: 9/10

Doll Critique.
The background feels too dark considering this is supposed to be NYC and it made the demons blend too much. You needed a much brighter place for the background, like a side street off of Times Square. You were accurate in including details of your story, it just needs something to throw it above and beyond.

Drabble Critique.
"This was going to be a breeze." I laughed. This line just made me crack up after the build up of the difficulty of the battle. And the demon finding her beautiful and basically killing himself on her sword because of it, that was too much. I wish you had included the fight with her father! Certainly she couldn't use her beauty to beat him, so I wonder what trick she would have up her sleeve to defeat him.

Doll Critique.
I loved the border; it was pink and set off the Sue nicely, altho the background could have done with being a bit brighter so as to make the Sue stand out better. After all, she's the star, remember? XD

Drabble Critique.
This was absolutely hilarious. XD I just love the way that you keep writing the Sue's name in full every time! Also, the ridiculousness of the battle, the demon's ignoble end, the wonderful details... this is a fantastic drabble and is most definitely all Sue. Well done!



baby, you got me. ♥

Last edited by Miranda_ : 12-13-2010 at 03:26 PM.
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