[Miranda_]

Just a few things; firstly, you haven't really given your character any personality strengths as such. Also, you do really need some more personality weaknesses; the only one that really does for a weakness is stubbornness. You could fit in with that "strong minded" for a strength, and "sulky" as a weakness, for example; try to make all strengths and weaknesses fit together. Your intro paragraph needs to be longer; you need to describe your character a bit more. How does she feel? Is she nervous or excited? Is she thinking of doing her best at school, or only thinking of wanting to sit down at the feast? Pad it out a bit. Otherwise, a good effort.

Make a new post with the changes so I can see how you've improved.