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12-29-2008, 10:51 PM
ooc: Very good for your first try (I am assuming) but you do have some flaws. First: Your weaknesses. They are great weaknesses except for the fact that it was mean for personality. So it could be like 'She loses her voice around the popular group because they make her feel belittled' or 'Authority people make her feel afraid because they have more power than her' or 'She doesn't like being in the center of attention because she gets nervous fits and stage fright'.
You also need a first paragraph to introduce your charrie. This needs to be 5-6 sentences long, maybe more.
Love is much like a wild rose, beautiful and calm, but willing to draw blood in its defense.
~Mark Overby
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