10-12-2008, 08:24 AM
You need to shade the top; it's just solid black, with no shading at all. Also, it needs a few wrinkles in it where it falls down; as well as shading under the bust and around the waist. The shorts look scribble shaded, as well as not really resembling shorts that much; I thought they looked more like a skirt. You need to actually draw in shorts' legs; even hotpants have defined leg parts. The hair is OK, but needs more stranding, as well as a few messy bits here and there. ^^ You also need to shade the armwarmers, as they're just blocked in, too.