I thank you for using my base. xD
And the highlights in the hair should be less chunky. That's what's wrong with that.
Ah! Mais oui! I agree with evilfairy. You should put more contrast into the clothing. ((If you don't know what contrast is, here's a tip:

The bottom one has more contrast. Most dollers use contrast to make the shading on a doll stand out. You don't NEED more contrast, but it helps a lot in the overall effect - especially with a base with a DARK outline in comparison to it's shading inside.))